Author: Jules Julius
Published Date: March 26, 2014
Publishing Co.: Self-published
Pages: 56
Rating: 2 out of 5 stars
This will be a short review, full of constructive criticisms.
First, the grammar and punctuation needs a hard edit. Quotations were backwards every single time. Sometimes there were periods in the middle of sentences. “Said,” was capitalized every time and used far too much.
Second, I question the age group for which this is written. I can’t really tell who it’s directed at but, I found some of the content questionable. Like Roger bragging how he has no trouble with the ladies and hitting on a female labrador in heels and lipstick, only to be slapped in response because his come on was well, basic.
Third, it could really use more of a focus on the therapy aspect of the story. I think it would be great to teach kids about the world of therapy and therapy dogs and what they actually accomplish.
There is a lot of possibility with this story with some more work and some fine tuning.
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